"Use develop or challenge ' You did a great job of contrasting the images of conventions / codes from music videos of a similar genre to your own. Taking the analysis a step further to not just highlight similarity but to talk about to what extent you 'used / developed or challenged' any of these conventions would have added more to the explanation. Using words like contrast / signifier/ connotation / denotation etc, (all our representation / film language adds to the impact of your research, too). remember you title 'conventional use of narrative' isn't really specific enough. You needed to say, "use of flashback as a narrative convention." Flashbacks aren't the only narrative structure a music video can use. Make it clear you understand this.
Continuing to use film language explaining things like mise-en-scene as part of your character choices for your last contrast would also have added to the sophistication of your idea. The last comparison didn't make enough of a point. You could have used a lot more of the codes and conventions for a point to make, or to just make the point that you used a female lead etc.
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"Use develop or challenge '
You did a great job of contrasting the images of conventions / codes from music videos of a similar genre to your own. Taking the analysis a step further to not just highlight similarity but to talk about to what extent you 'used / developed or challenged' any of these conventions would have added more to the explanation.
Using words like contrast / signifier/ connotation / denotation etc, (all our representation / film language adds to the impact of your research, too).
remember you title 'conventional use of narrative' isn't really specific enough. You needed to say, "use of flashback as a narrative convention." Flashbacks aren't the only narrative structure a music video can use. Make it clear you understand this.
Continuing to use film language explaining things like mise-en-scene as part of your character choices for your last contrast would also have added to the sophistication of your idea. The last comparison didn't make enough of a point. You could have used a lot more of the codes and conventions for a point to make, or to just make the point that you used a female lead etc.